"The Green Shades" Creative Writing
Name : Alfi Muhammad Shofiyudin
NPM : C1.212200030
Genre : Thriller
Synopsis
Donny, a man who lives in a city with average economy,
living in peace at the city that crowded with people, he decided to take his
holiday for camping in a forest to relieve himself from stress and problems
that keep disturbs his mind in a very long time, he packs his things for it and
travel to the camp site with his car, he meets another campers and talk so many
things with them, he have so much fun until the sun is starting to drown, they build
a camp fire and build tents together in a circle, after that, when midnight
comes, something happens and that feels things goes wrong for Donny, even his
instinct tells him to go back home while he have no idea what’s going on around
him and he find an unexpected moment and that’s will be the only one moment
which happens so terrifying for him. He discovered a group of cannibal peoples
that actually it’s the campers he had known.
Setting & Time
City (Morning, Afternoon, Night)
Forest (Evening – Midnight)
Character & Characteristics
Donny
The main character
of this story, he’s grown man with good personalities but can’t handle problems
that makes him overthink it.
Risni
The protagonist
of this story, she’s college girl, a genius woman that can outsmart almost
everything that comes to her life.
Tobby
The antagonist of the story, a manipulative leader of
the cannibal group, his looks may like a good guy that could trick someone.
Serene
Antagonist of the
story, a member of the cannibal group, she’s a pretty girl yet has a dark truth
about her.
Fred
Antagonist of the
story, a member of the cannibal group, he’s the big african guy but less
intelligent.
“The Green
Shades”
One day, morning’s sunshine shines a city, there’s a
short straight black hair man with his name Donny Hecker lives in an apartment,
he’s gets up from the bed, “Another same day to suffer in my life.” He said with
forceful smile, he picks up his phone, watching to its screen to check is there
any notification he that he got, only few tasks of his work from home job that
has given for him and when he see the date “10th March 2012” he
remembered that tomorrow its his holiday time, he take a deep breath of relieve
from his past problems, like he had divorced parents when he was a teenager,
but he let it all pass and flow like a river, because there’s not much he can
do about it, after that he goes to the shower to take a bath, cleaning himself
from smelly and tiredness things to refreshing his own body.
After that, the dress himself up with nice clothes
that he bought, a black t-shirt and long sport training pants, he wears it not
to meant for goes outside for sports, because it’s the material of his clothes
that he feels comfort with, then he walks to the kitchen to cooks his own
breakfast, a rice and an egg with sauce, simple yet delicious it’s enough for
him, he eats it to fulfill his stomach for work, after that he goes to computer
to do some reports tasks and he’s doing his freelancer job. “Alright, lets done
this all lads, they will not be done by itself” said Donny to encourage himself
before doing all of his work with full energy that he has, he starts to do his
work, he working all reports he got such like making tables of report that
filled with a lots of data things, making some important business documents, he
proceed that with careful, detailed like how professional does, and also doing
his freelancer job as a designer, doing every works that his clients wanted
for, he’s used to be in this situation, cause his doings are paid worth that he
has chosen for.
Finished all of his works, Donny smiled and close his
eyes “Damn~, so nice to done all that things though, finally I can give myself
a beautiful self reward!~.” said himself and lays to his bed to rest his tired
body that has staying on the computer for hours of works that he needs to be
done in a one day with fast as he can, Donny started to thinks about what
holiday that he should decide, he’s thinking about beach, but he doesn’t like
the hot temperature of sun that burn his skin, then he has idea from one of his
friend’s old discussion about camping, he seems to be interested to do that for
his holiday, after that he plans on rent the camping kits near his apartments,
packing things that he will needed for it, such as clothes, tissues, foods and
drinks and many stuff that should important later for him in his camping
holiday, he hope that this will be the best holiday for his self-reward ever in
his whole life.
After all preparing that he did, Donny checks his car
on the night time, it’s on full fuel and no problem at all, then he ready for
his trip to camp site, Donny put all his stuff like packs and camping kit that he
had prepared for it, then he goes to his bedroom and having a rest and sleep
well on his bed, he dreaming something, in an empty white place he see an old
house, it looks like made from an old wood, a simple architecture design, Donny
tries to go to the house but weirdly he still didn’t close enough with it, he
tries to run yet it didn’t do any changes, it feels like the house itself are
moving backwards against him, or something holding his position to stay in his
place, and after that weird dream he has experienced, he wakes up from his
sleep on midnight, he looks things around him, but nothing seems to be worried
for him so he decide to go back to his sleep and nothing disturb him again on
his peaceful sleep until tomorrow morning.
Sounds of his alarms rings and wakes up Donny, he
slowly open his eyes and feeling very happy today, it’s time for him to enjoy
his own moment to relax fully with nothing to worry about, Donny looking on the
window watching the skies, a very beautiful blue sky that he never seen before
“What a beautiful scenery today, really boost my holiday hahaha~.” Said Donny
with really amazing good mood on his holiday, he goes to his bathroom with
mumbling some of his favorite music he always listens with, he washes his own
body, washing his faces, cleaning his tooth, and voila he’s done taking
a bath, he went to his room takes his outfit for his trip, a nice jackets, t-shirts
and jeans that he had bought before, he wears it and looking at the mirror
“Who’s the handsome man?? hehe.” Said himself with cheerful voice, after that
he goes to his own car and starts its engine, he adjusting the mirrors before
starting his trip, and finds a campsite he can found on his phone.
Donny searching the campsite on his phone, he opens
the map application and found a little far away from his hometown, the campsite
has its name “Forest Forever” seems a nice name that makes him think “Hmm… this
place seems interesting… Forest Forever… the forest seems to be so comfy until
you decide to not go back home? I think? Ahh kinda funny name, but that doesn’t
look bad enough.” Said Donny about the campsite’s name, he starts riding his
own car on his way to the Forest Forever campsite, on his road trip he’s not
familiar with the roadway he’s following on his phone’s maps, the surroundings
of its roadway its just a trees like how forests it is, no rest area or things that
often normally spotted while on his trip way before “Man…, no rest area? I hope
the fuel is enough, however the campsite doesn’t far away from here, maybe it’s
good idea to play some music on my playlist while on my way.” Said Donny who
plays his music while still on his way, when he almost reach the campsite
place, he sees another car driver, he speeds up his car and try to talks with
that car driver on its side.
“Hello!~, you’re gonna camping at the campsite too?.”
Said Donny who louden his voice to talk with another car driver, then the car
besides him start to open its windows.
“Yupp!~ you’re gonna camp too??” Answers a voice of a
woman, Donny bit surprised and starts to introducing himself.
“Yeah!~ My name’s Donny!~ I’m from a city.” Said Donny
“Ohh Donny?~, Mine’s Risni, I’m a tourist not from
this country!~.” Said Risni, the girl that Donny talk with.
After that evening short conversation on the road,
both of them arrived at the campsite, they parks their own cars, walking
together to the tickets place and meets with the camps member, “Hello, my name
is Tobby Ellegant, and welcome to our campsite Forest Forever!~, its our first grand
openings! As our first visitors that come here, both of you gets free
entrance!.” Said the camp leader, Tobby.
“Ahh~ That’s really great to hear that, a free tickets
ehehehe…” Said Donny.
“Huhh.. that’s why there’s no rest area on its way to
come here, maybe not yet many peoples knows it.” Said Risni.
“Yeah well … there will be a rest area while on its
way to come here, pardon me for the inconvenience experience you’ve been had,
but hey let’s go to the camp area shall we?” Said Tobby invites Donny and Risni
to come in.
Then Donny and Risni carries their camping kit from
cars, and follows Tobby as he walks goes to the camp area, and there’s tents of
the camp members, there’s five tents, and also there’s another camp members, a
pretty girl and a big African man, Donny and Risni sees them and Tobby
introduces another of his camp members.
“Here’s Serene, she’s a camp members who will listen
to all your questions, don’t be hesitate, if you have a problems, just call
her~.” Said Tobby who introduce Serene the pretty camp member, while Serene
greets both of them
“And this one my big guy wohohoo~, he’s Fred, a camp
member who manage logistics supplies, if you need anything, just tell him!~.”
Said Tobby introduces the big African man, Fred, he’s nicely smiles to Donny
and Risni.
After that, Donny and Risni sets up their tents with
the help of camp members and prepare other things like supplies and camping
tools & stuff they needed, and finally they build up the campfire.
The sun goes down fully, then night coming up, Donny
and Risni with other camp members gathering around the campfire, the camp
members plays music, Serene is the singer, Tobby is the guitarist and Fred
plays maracas, Donny and Risni enjoys their show playing music nicely, Donny
admiring their talents on music are really good, even Risni approve that, then
after the long nice music show is over, Fred shows another of his talent, he do
a magic trick, Fred take a card, hold the card on his hand, flip his hands and
flip it back, then poof~ the card is vanished in a second, everybody is
amused with his magic trick, after that Tobby starts the heart to heart
conversation time, to open everybody thoughts of what they always hold on
inside, such like a problem stuff, then Donny speaks,
“Have you guys ever feels sad when your ideas never
being listened just because of the lack social power you have? I really
depressed about that man, I always felt disappointed every time with that
problems, and yet felt mad.” Said Donny
“Yeah… I’ve been in that situation, but don’t worry
about all those problems, there will a time where your own ideas will be heard
and everybody approve that.” Said Serene.
“Well… Sometimes people with higher social status are
always forget to think being an equal with all people who doesn’t relate with
them.” Said Risni.
“Ahh yeah, that situation bro… I never understand
about that, I don’t know about people minds when things happen like that.” Said
Fred.
“Thank you guys, I really appreciate for being
listened like this, I’m feel comfort with you all.” Said Donny
After the conversation ends, they eating together,
Serene cooks meats that really delicious “Mmmmm~ is this chicken meat?.”Said
Donny and Serene answers with smile and nods, after they full enough, they go
inside their own tents, all camp members are sleeps, Donny and Risni sleeps too
in their own tent.
Some sound of growling stomach heard, Donny wakes up
in the Midnight and want to take a dump, he had full enough before he comes to
the campsite, so he decides to go out to the tent while carrying tissues, Donny
finds surroundings bushes where he can take a dump privately, he walked far
enough for it, and he starts to do that until he feels satisfied and relieved
of holding it, surprisingly he see an old house, he feel suspicious about it,
Donny slowly sneaks to go close to it, until he close with the house, he peeks
what’s inside of it, he terrified of what he see, there’s many corpses of a
human that have been skinned, and when he look a bit to the right, there’s a
black things that resembling like a human that turn and see him too, Donny
quickly crouching and run away in silent while concealing with the bushes,
Donny comes back to the camp area, all the camps members tent are empty, Donny
go to Risni’s tent, he’s calls Risni, she’s wakes up while open the tent and
Donny pulls her and takes her to the behind of the tent.
“Donny!~ where are you!~.” Screaming yet low voice
sound, it’s seems like Tobby. “I’m here behind the tent!~.” Donny answers, then
Tobby come over him, Donny pulls him too for crouch and hiding, “I see an old
house, man!, do you even know there’s a building?? And you know what the worst
part of it its? It’s filled with unskin human corpses!~.” said Donny with
terrified voice.
“So, you’ve known about that-.“ said Tobby that
suddenly hits Donny head with a woods that he had secretly hid it on his back,
and also Fred suddenly showed up behind Risni and hit her head too, Donny and
Risni fall unconscious and got blacked out.
“Good morning sunshine~, wake up hehe… you know… homeless
people… we will do anything in order to fulfill our daily needs…” said Tobby to
Donny and Risni who wakes up and got tied together in one rope at the old house.
“What the heck is wrong with you???.” Said Risni with anger. “Shut up!~, you
have no idea what’s happen right?... fine I’ll tell you for your last lifetime,
we all like humans meat… they taste like chicken, nice one… and what’s the best
part?... they’re free hahahaha~.” Said Tobby with looks that like a mental
illness person. “Now both of you go to sleep… we have uhhh person to
sort hehe…” After that Tobby and the others leave the place, “Damn…
motherfather…. he’s really a sick person at all.” Said Donny. Then Risni
initiatively struggling to release from the rope, Donny follows the struggling
from the ropes too, Risni looks around and found an axe that sharp enough to
cut the rope, Donny and Risni moves together go get the axe, Risni takes the
axe and holds it by her legs, then carefully she chop the rope, Donny gets
surprised when she’s chopped it, both of them are free now, but there’s someone
who come inside the house, it’s Serene, Donny and Risni pretend to get back
being gets tied up, Serene comes closer, “Ohh Donny… poor Donny… poor little
boy… wanna eat chicken again? Hahaha-.” Said Serene. “Nah- no thanks, I
have money.” Said Donny that suddenly punches Serene in the face that instantly
makes her unconscious.
After that both of them gets out from the house,
sneaks out on their way to their tent, Donny leads the way, when they almost
near the tent, they hear Tobby speaking something “…I told you to carry that
axe you mindless trash!.” Some echoing voice of Tobby screaming, they quickly
run to their tent, take their car keys, “I have a shotgun inside my car, we
need to get there before they do!~.” Said Donny to Risni. Suddenly a flying axe
passes through and cuts some of their tent, “There you are!.” Said Tobby from
distance, Donny and Risni run as fast as they can to go car park, as Tobby and
Fred follows them behind with mad eyes, struggles to walk on the tall grass,
Donny almost fall but Risni holds him, until they success arrived at the car
park, Risni quickly tries to open Donny’s car but it’s jammed, “I’ll hold them
off.” Said Donny who bravely faces both of them, Donny throws a big rock at
them, Tobby gets knocks on his head, while Fred toughly resists Donny’s rock
attack, while Risni almost unlock Donny’s car, its annoyingly jammed, Donny
defend himself from Fred’s attack, he punches Donny’s hand that it’s in defend
stance, Donny feels really pain because of great damage he takes from Fred’s until
he’s falls down and gets punched on his chest, he coughed bit of blood, Risni
finally takes Donny’s shotgun and boom! Shoots Fred with two shoot wounds him,
and he’s dead, and also she’s shoot on Tobby who gets wakes up and tries to
throw axe at her.
Risni carries Donny who gets wounded so bad, he keeps
coughing and breath poorly, she’s takes him to his car then rides quickly to
the nearest hospital she can find, while Donny starts to black out again, Risni
rushed his car as fast as she can drive until she found the hospital and saves
Donny from his wound, Donny quickly gets inside, the doctor and his staff are
treat him, and after hours of wait, the doctor comes out from the room, and
tells Risni about Donny’s condition, the good news is, he’s safe now.
Risni reports this incident to the police station, surprisingly there's a lot of cases of missing peoples, the police searches to the campsite location and it's been proofed that the cases of missing peoples are found and become the victim of the cannibals group camp.
THE END
Wuaa~ this is scarier than zombie, right?! Be careful when you are in the nature!
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